How to Write Special Offers They Can’t Refuse

My favorite move is, The Godfather. Has been for many decades now. So naturally I love the famous line from that film, “I’m gonna make ‘em an offer he can’t refuse.”

It’s always a good idea to keep this line in mind when you’re writing special offer direct-response sales copy for your product in a sales letter, e-blast or website landing page.

To really drive home a special offer, you have to sweeten the deal with extras that will make it too good to turn down. Do this by including these five elements in your offer.

  1.  Include a limited-time special offer call to action
  2. Sell the savings
  3. Add a free or nearly-free bonus
  4. Create a value demonstration
  5. Reverse the risk by offering guarantees

 Here is an example of special offer marketing copy I recently wrote at the end of a direct-response landing page for an online human resource services company called, HR Union (I’ve changed the actual name).

The copy is highly persuasive because I utilize all five special offer elements.

Use these elements when writing your special offer direct response copy, and you’ll probably see a nice uptick in your conversion rates.


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So if at any point during the first 30 days of your membership you’re not completely satisfied, we’ll refund your $147. (Reverse the risk; money-back guarantee)

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About the author: Casey Demchak


Casey Demchak is an award-winning copywriter and consultant who is a proven expert at writing sales copy that sells, persuades and generates leads. Casey’s sincere, heartfelt passion is inspiring his clients and helping them skyrocket their success. He is dedicated to achieving this through his copywriting, e-books, coaching, and his highly authentic inspirational writing. You can learn more about Casey by visiting CaseyDemchak.com.

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